Tony Lu From China, joined Sep 2000, 534 posts, RR: 3 Posted (9 years 7 months 4 weeks 7 hours ago) and read 4130 times:
I need comments on this descriptive essay on an airplane trip (CO A380 HKG-CLE). What should I revise or do? Thx!
One thing that I love to do is go riding on an airplane. These massive machines have always fascinated me since I was just a little kid. It is very amazing that a gigantic piece of metal can fly in the air at about 500 miles per hour. So far, I have been on 10 trips.
Almost every airport has Jetways. A Jetway is a corridor that extends from an airport terminal to an aircraft, for the boarding and disembarkation of passengers. To get on the plane, you walk through this narrow tunnel. The Airbus 380 is big as 20 football fields back in the US. Once on the plane, the pilot and cabin crew greet you warmly. There is a soft hum of the engine and calm music playing from the plane’s speakers. The airplane seats are soft and in good condition but are nothing compared to the fluffy leathery seats in First class. “Good morning passengers. This is your pilot speaking. We will be departing Hong Kong to Cleveland in a few minutes. Meanwhile, sit back and enjoy the flight.” Soon after the pilot finishes his short speech, the plane starts to taxi. The cabin crew shows a short video about safety on the plane. “Flight attendants prepare for takeoff!” booms the pilot. The cabin lights dim. The plane’s four engines goes from a soft hum to a loud boom. The plane accelerates lightning fast to about 200 miles per hour. After that with a small jolt the plane aims toward the air and… takeoff!
The plane climbs at 15 degrees. The cabin gets slightly cooler as the plane gets higher and the pressure makes everyone’s ears pop. Finally, the plane levels off and the cabin fills with a wonderful aroma of food. The cabin crew passes out trays of chicken and rice. The passengers eat and talk with each other. Once in a while, the plane shakes and wobbles. The wind is causing the plane to do it. Sometimes it is just a little jolt of wind sometimes the plane wobbles uncontrollably. The cabin crew serves ice cream and the cabin lights dim again. This time it is for the in-flight movie. The main screen and the PTVs on the A380 show a long movie. Most of the passengers are asleep.
After breakfast the next day, everyone gets ready for landing. “Good morning passengers, this is your pilot speaking. We are about 200 miles north of Hopkins and starting our decent into Cleveland. Please turn off all your electronics and fasten your seatbelts. The temperature in Cleveland is 75 degrees. All of us at Continental Airlines would like to thank you for flying with us.” Again like takeoff, the pressure changes to there is a popping sensation in everyone’s ears. “Flight attendants prepare for landing,” says the pilot. The plane goes lower and lower. The landing gear is out. The flaps and spoilers are activated too. With a sudden bump, the plane touches the runway and stops. What a wonderful flight.
That is what an airplane flight is like. The adventure keeps me coming back for more. I will always enjoy an airplane flight
Airbus_A340 From Hong Kong, joined Mar 2000, 1555 posts, RR: 21 Reply 1, posted (9 years 7 months 4 weeks 5 hours ago) and read 3949 times:
If this is an essay, I think you should not write so much as if it was a running-commentary, like "first this, then this, then this..." it may bore the reader. So you may want to try and briefly talk about something but then describe in more details in another area. You'll usually find that in the 'real' trip reports. One might find the food or service interesting in particular. Have a go!
UN_b732 From United States of America, joined Jul 2001, 4286 posts, RR: 4 Reply 2, posted (9 years 7 months 4 weeks 4 hours ago) and read 3909 times:
How old are you? Are you writing this for school? (just curious, I did a similar piece about a MetroJet flight I took)
I know what a PTV is, but some people may not. Please describe in piece.
Enough of my Constructive Crticisim.
Tony Lu From China, joined Sep 2000, 534 posts, RR: 3 Reply 5, posted (9 years 7 months 3 weeks 5 days 23 hours ago) and read 3657 times:
To tell you the truth, 9V-SVC, I picked the title to attract people . It is strange but I thought it fits best in trip reports even if it a bit special . So how do you think about it, 9V-Svc and others?
Highflier92660 From United States of America, joined Apr 2004, 596 posts, RR: 0 Reply 6, posted (9 years 1 month 3 weeks 1 day 5 hours ago) and read 3124 times:
The above article made me smile. Aviation Week & Space Technology just reported that poor CLE has lost more "big iron" flights since 9/11 than all other airports in the U.S. but one. Today more Regional jets fly out of CLE than 100+ seat aircraft. I believe Continental even uses a relatively small aircraft, the Boeing 757-200ER between Cleveland and London Gatwick seasonally. CLE is an airport without wide body passenger jets.
If that weren't enough, the terminal which was designed long ago, couldn't hope to accommodate the Airbus A380. The recent terminal upgrade was for Regional jets only. Lastly, poor Cleveland has relatively short runways the longest being 9,000 feet, scheduled (maybe) to be extended to 11,250 feet.
Redngold From United States of America, joined Mar 2000, 6907 posts, RR: 51 Reply 7, posted (9 years 1 month 3 weeks 22 hours ago) and read 3018 times:
TonyLu lives near CLE and so do I. Despite having repeated this ad nauseum, I will do it again for your benefit... CLE is capable of handling all aircraft up to and including the An-225, which visited a few months ago. We regularly see chartered and/or private 747s of the POTUS and foreign dignitaries visiting the Cleveland Clinic. We also saw an A340, two years ago, landing on the 8,000 ft. runway. (So did fully-loaded the An-225.)
Although our airport may not be the newest, freshest and best-planned airport, there is no reason why TonyLu shouldn't write about an A380 flying in and out of here. By the time that aircraft is built and operating on regular schedules here in the U.S., we could have a place for it. Let me also mention that FedEx runs two to three A300-600B4s here every day and that we could be a candidate for an A380 as a single replacement for the several aircraft.
In short -- let him have some fun and stop busting on our airport.
Highflier92660 From United States of America, joined Apr 2004, 596 posts, RR: 0 Reply 9, posted (9 years 1 month 2 weeks 6 days 6 hours ago) and read 2784 times:
At long last! Somewhere in the great beyond, Jack Doyle the former airport manager back in the 1960's is smiling down at CLE. Thanks N766UA (Boeing 777-222.) When I flew my last trip to the East Coast we were out over Lake Erie at FL 370 heading towards Jamestown (JHW) New York, and I thought I spotted some activity at the end of 24L-6R. We've pretty much pulled out of Cleveland so I am out of the loop unless I check the NOTAMS.