kilavoud
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Need Please Some Small American English Help

Sun Feb 01, 2004 1:51 am

During our next trip in USA X.Y. and myself will stop over in LA. As we never met before, we would like you to arrange our first-ever meeting during the day of March X and why not take this opportunity to visit your business premises ? If both our suggestion and the day suit you, please let me know about it. Best regards…….

Does it sound like American english ? Please correct. I will appreciate and thank you for helping me to progress in American english.

Cheers. Kilavoud.



 
sushka
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RE: Need Please Some Small American English Help

Sun Feb 01, 2004 2:02 am

Here:

During our next trip to USA X.Y. and will stop over in LA. Because we have never met, I would like to arrange our first meeting on March X, at the same time we could get to know your business area. Let me know if this can work out. Best regards...............
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TWFirst
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RE: Need Please Some Small American English Help

Sun Feb 01, 2004 2:07 am

My suggestion:

During our next trip to the U.S.A., X.Y. and I will stop over in L.A. Since we have never met, I would like to arrange our first meeting on March X. At that time, we could also get to know more about your business. Please let me know if this is possible.

Thank you.
Best regards,
Kilavoud Schwitzermann
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kilavoud
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RE: Need Please Some Small American English Help

Sun Feb 01, 2004 2:16 am

Thank you for your help . Already two answers . Really nice !

Cheers. Kilavoud.
 
tranceport
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RE: Need Please Some Small American English Help

Sun Feb 01, 2004 5:05 am

It doesn't get any better than TWFirst's response. Besides being American English, the grammar is perfect and the wording is professional.

 
USAIRWAYS321
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RE: Need Please Some Small American English Help

Sun Feb 01, 2004 8:28 pm

I agree, TWFirst's version is the best way this can be worded.

Brett
 
L-188
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RE: Need Please Some Small American English Help

Sun Feb 01, 2004 8:47 pm

I would change the last line of TWfirsts translation

Please let me know if this is possible.

to


During our next trip to the U.S.A., X.Y. and I will stop over in L.A. Since we have never met, I would like to arrange our first meeting on March X. At that time, we could also get to know more about your business.

Please contact me if a meeting at that time can be arranged .

[Edited 2004-02-01 12:55:39]
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fly727
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RE: Need Please Some Small American English Help

Mon Feb 02, 2004 7:33 am

Just in case you cancel it and decide to go to Mexico Big grin :

Durante nuestro próximo viaje a los México, X.Y y yo haremos una escala en Cancun. Puesto que nos conocemos todavía, me gustaría que programáramos nuestra primera reunión el día X de Marzo. Podríamos aprovechar y conocer más acerca de su negocio. Hágame saber si esto es posible.

Gracias.
Kilovoud Schwitzermann.

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RE: Need Please Some Small American English Help

Mon Feb 02, 2004 11:45 am

But if you board the wrong plane and end up in Slovenia  Big grin, this is what you'll need:

Ko bom naslednjic obiskal Slovenijo, se bova XY in jaz ustavila v Ljubljani. Ker se se nisva spoznala, bi za X marec predlagal prvi sestanek. Takrat pa bi lahko tudi spoznal vase podjetje. Prosim sporocite mi, ce je to mozno.

(Note: I've omitted special Slovenian characters for the ch, sh, and zh sounds.)
 
Cory6188
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RE: Need Please Some Small American English Help

Mon Feb 02, 2004 11:19 pm

Although your initial attempt may not sound like American English, your writing definitely seems highly intelligent and sophisticated. Since you're from Switzerland, I'm going to assume that English is not your first language. Excellent job considering that English isn't your first language - it can definitely be a challenge.
 
garnetpalmetto
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RE: Need Please Some Small American English Help

Mon Feb 02, 2004 11:53 pm

Actually, using x, y, and I is incorrect due to the series being more than 2 total individuals. "meet myself, x, and y" would be more correct.
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covert
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RE: Need Please Some Small American English Help

Tue Feb 03, 2004 5:58 am

You could use British English or American English, it doesn't matter, just as long as you keep it grammitically sound and professional.

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